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Arianna opened her eyes and harsh bright lights blinded her. She squinted as she tried pull herself into sitting position. Numbness gripped her body, pins and needles itching beneath her skin from her neck to her toes.
Ari closed her eyes and tried to remember her life before the room. Nothing came to mind. Not a name, or a favorite color, or even a glimmer of a memory to help cast away the veil over the mystery of how she'd arrived in the room.
Ooooh, this is really fun opening there...not too often that you run into memory wipe storylines, but I always do find those quite fun and it looks like that is exactly what has happened to this person here. Its interesting to see how she appears to recognize the existence of memories and what a room is...although she can't really remember her past, this suggest her brain isn't totally wiped, but some select parts have been taken out somehow. Definitely leaves you with a few questions to consider here.
Ari slowly slid open her eyes again, cautious of the bright lights, and looked around at the room. It was very standard; gray walls, gray floor, gray ceiling, painfully bright industrial lights banishing all shadow, a lone metal door solemnly barricading the way out. She seemed to be lying on a gurney, with several multicoloured wires trailing from her body to a large, imposing metal box covered with dials and flashing bulbs. A small, dark green screen displayed her heart rate and breaths per minute and everything on tiny neon green graphs. A little ways from her cot was a round oak table with a laptop on it, a dark green screen covered with minusicle neon lettering, just like the machine. Hoping it held some information about her past, Ari leaned forward, squinting to read the diminutive script.
Alright, yeah that theory is being completely reinforced there, she shows no problems or confusion at all when it comes to recognizing things around here. There's a really nicely done description there to show what her surroundings are like...and I that's definitely nice to have at the start of a story.
Progress: Successful memory erase! Experiment appears to retain all previous skills and knowledge, as well as basic survival skills, and has no memory of it's previous life. But something is different about this experiment that we can't figure out. Hopefully we'll find out soon, before the experiment does. Things can get out of hand with the special ones if they find out their gifts on their own. Surgery was a success. Waiting for experiment to wake up.
Well I'm gonna make a wild guess and say that this person wasn't meant to be reading that...maybe, this piece certainly leaves you wondering here...and the rest of that message only adds to the whole mystery of things here...and I'm loving it. This one kind of officially confirms all the initial suspicions we have while also adding plenty more which I think makes for a very nicely done ending here. Overall, this all comes together to be a pretty effective prologue right here. This certainly seems like a story that I'd read at any rate.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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