Mars

Hey, ofir's brother :) I like this. I always find haiku hard because you have to present a pretty image in so few syllables, you know? But I think you ...

Hey angel, welcome to the site! Check out the rules and review a couple of pieces, m'kay? :D So! Wow, this is a gigantic hunk of story, isn't it? You ...

Hello, hello, hello! No More Tears fall quick, As melted wax, That hardens On the floor. Nice comparison especially the last two lines, but I don't think of melted wax ...

Hello! I love this. It's like a feast for me, because I'm reading about this young beautiful couple in this amazing garden and it's being described wonderfully. Seriously, I want ...

Hey, welcome to the site! Before I critique this I'll ask you to check out the rules . Please keep a 2:1 ratio of reviews done to works posted; that ...

Hello! Just a warning: I really like this poem. I think it's really good. So that means I'm going to be especially nit-picky and harsh in this review, so it ...

Hello! This is a really interesting beginning, Talona and I don't think I've read anything like it before. Partly because it's a diary format - which is fairly rare on ...

Heya! Welcome to the site! Check out the rules. The one I'll mention now is probably the most important as it keeps the site running: keep a 2:1 ratio of ...

Oh goodness. This has certainly captured your feeling well, I think. I like the repetition of 'keep walking' because it adds a sort of frantic element to the poem, which ...

Hi! “Your getting a zero on this quiz and I want you to go see Mr. Granger Should be you're . And she didn’t look at Rex for his unwanted ...

Hello hello! abstract from the rest of the world, I don't think abstract is the right word to use there because it doesn't make sense - what about distracted from ...

Hi Do! *tacklehugglesnugs* Have you heard the song (Nothing But) Flowers by the Talking Heads? That's what this reminded me of. :D If I cannot recall why I've woken up ...

Hello! I really like this. I love how you introduce Edward - I have a picture of him as a slightly insecure, but good, musician...and we don't know much else ...

Hello! So, yeah. A limerick is a humorous, five-line poem with a rhyme scheme of AABBA - so lines 1, 2, and 5 rhyme, and then lines 3 and 4 ...

Hello! Let me first say that I love this poem. It sounds so breezy and and summery which of course is exactly what it's about, so good job on that. ...