Mars

Hey Kisba! I'm here to review this. You're right, this is very unconventional. Poetry can bend the rules, though, right? To be honest, though, there is a point where poetry ...

Hey des! releases a sliver of vitality I think this line is too many syllables - though I do really like it! Perhaps you could find a shorter word than ...

Hey faithlessfate! Cool name. Just to let you know, we have a rule that says you should have two reviews before posting your own work, okay? Anyway. I like this ...

Hey! (that are extremely crappy if you've noticed) I don't think they're extremely crappy. Actually, if I read them, and then read this, it might make me rethink my opinion ...

Hey asxz! This was so not lame - it was cute! And very, very relatable. However...I could tell that you wrote it fast, because there were some typos. It helps ...

Hey Ember! Sorry it took me so long to get to this, but I'm here now - let's get started! Also, I know pretty much nothing about the history of ...

Okay! So! Wow. Yeah. Things happen in this chapter, don't they? :) I actually skipped the second bit of chapter 3 for this. I mean, I read it, but I ...

Hey llobalito08! Okay! So, this is a really interesting poem. There were a couple errors, so I'll point those out first. They we're in a quiet bar, shortly after mid-night. ...

Hey again! So, I don't have much to say that's already been said. Anti-pop did a good job of pointing out the nit-picks, so I won't go into those. So! ...

(There are a couple of typos in this one, eg misplaced apostrophes. Make sure you read it again and watch out for those!) KEITH KEITH KEITH! I love this guy. ...

Hello again, Moriah! As per your request - Veronica - To be honest, I don't get a great sense of her personality. I know pretty much what I knew before, ...

Hey Lord Anzius! Sorry it's taken me so long to get to this, but I'm here now, so I'll get on it asap. I have to say, I had no ...

Hi Matthemus! Welcome to YWS! I see this is your first post, so you might want to check out our rules. One of them is to have 2 works reviewed ...

Hey Jesse! Just to warn you, I might have a lot of wording suggestions for you, which in no way means your story isn't good. Actually, what it means is ...

Hey erratik_statik! Welcome to YWS! Memory sweet memory Comma after the first memory , no? Deep breaths, skipped beats and electric thrills I could be reading this differently, but I ...