MarbleToast

Why do these always duplicate? Sorry!

Hey there. Me here for a review. So, the main problem here is grammar. I'll take the first sentence as an example; “Hi my name is Timothy Daniel Super.I’m Thirteen ...

I think that any idea can be made into something great. If you have enough enthusiasm with the idea, go for it.

I believe Urag was wanting a copy of this. At The Throat of The World Unrelenting Force and Whirlwind Sprint recharge 30% faster. Good to know I'm not the only ...

I guess so, once you explain it. But I'd say anyone who hadn't known this would be easily confused.

I though the statement contradicted itself. It just wasn't worded well. "I had not seen much of the Sun..." I thought that he hadn't seen much of the Sun. "...or ...

Yeah, as a sidenote, I've scrapped this prologue, for every reason you've noted above. I felt like I wasn't writing it for fun, more as a task, which is ultimately ...

As a couple of ideas for another one of these, take a look at "Polybius" or "Killswitch". Less easter eggs, more urban legends, but still worth a look at.

Now you've said he's dancing, I can only see that.

The first line is from Oasis- Rock 'n Roll Star. Can I have a cookie?

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The first line is from Oasis- Rock 'n Roll Star. Can I have a cookie?

Sorry about the other duplicates, I have no idea how they got there.

Thanks for all the points. This was more of a test to see how well I could do this kind of thing- usually, I avoid it altogether. I'm surprised to ...