Maki-Chan

oh ok, thank you. ^_^ I'll put more detail into it.

oh foo. I'll repost this up as soon as I redo it. Making it slow down and stuff.

wow, I liked this ^_^

perhaps you can space it out a bit. Hard fo me to read.

I think you should space the paragraphs appart, and put this into separate parts. Like 'The only one part 1, part 2 part 3 and so on.' If you do ...

well i saw it deserves a 9/10. It was awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^_^

not too bad. But I see alot of angel poems. Perhaps your next one can be something really different?

well written, the words are so lovely put togther, but its way too short!

Hurray!!! ^_^ I'm glad you're are done with this chapter- I will be working on chapter 3. Hope you like it.

Hurray. I liked this part too ^_^ Using my own flesh as a shield, giving up all my hopes and dreams. I'll fix her up. And chapter 1 is on ...

sigh.... Oh kristi- she doesn't know we are even commenting. I'll send her and email.

thanks! ^_^ I'm working on chapter 1. Its getting easier now, so the wait won't be much longer.

Advice! 1. you should put this into parts 2. space out the paragraphs so its easier to read This will help attract more readers. Cause right now its so long ...

well this was alright, but I think its kind of a weak begining perhaps you can ignore most of the begining part of this, and focus more on his proposal ...

ok. With part 2 I feel more connected With Vienna. She strangly somewhat reminds mme of myself- wierd huh? I like part 2 of chapter 1 better. I'll read chapter ...