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I don't usually like abstract poems, but this one I found riveting- great job ^_^ In the first paragraph you change tenses- you say "We fly" (present tense) and then ...

There really isn't much more to criticize, but I really love your story! I do think you ought to describe more, and there is one thing I'd change "Awesome," shouted ...

Oooo, I like this! And there weren't any typos that I could see :) One teeny tiny thing, though. When Faye comes in and asks your MC which dress she ...

I Capture the Castle by Dodie Smith. Well, it's probably not the worst , but it's the worst I've read recently. It was just kind of boring and all through ...

First of all, great poem! I would have thought that this was one of those poems where there is no punctuation, but you use it at first, so, just a ...

I liked this poem. The repetitiveness of it really grabbed me (I could make a corny joke here pertaining to your title, but, well, just be grateful I caught myself ...

I love your poem- very well written. I'm curious about your MC now- would you mind if I asked what your NaNo's about? You don't have to answer... Around her ...

I know I'm kind of late to review, but I loved this poem- would you mind if I copied it down and slept with it under my pillow... please? Just ...

I'll definitely be looking for your story- I'll be tossing and turning all night in agony over why something wasn't right. when she did say that he was her one ...

In the YWS rules that I've read thrice over, it says when posting about someone's poem and/or story, you have to give criticism. But they don't tell you what to ...

Rigella, you took the words right out of my mouth. Good poem, but if you were to show us more about what is happening to the girl in the poem ...

Like MissMia said- Wow. Other than those spelling changes, and some of the grammar that everyone else mentioned- don't change a word of this poem. I love it. You feel ...