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Lydia1995

  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Pay Heed!

    Hello, I'm Lydia and I will be you reviewer today, Firstly I will start off by saying that I thought you did a very good job with the old English. ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: A Man Walks Through My House

    Hello, :D I have read your short story the enchanted house and I can now see where you got your inspiration from. I like this poem though the rhythm was ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: what can you see

    Awwww, I liked it, so yeah it was a bit cheesy but hey it was well written. It was exceotionally cute so a gold star for you. I love the ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Lions

    Hello, I liked this but I thought it was a bit of a broken rhythm because you broke off the sentences before they finished and used another line. However I ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Finders, Keepers

    Hello, I really liked this (apart from the info dump in the middle! :P) Other than that I thought it was a quirky little story that I really enjoyed! Well ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Your Smile

    I agree with July, your rhyming scheme can be confusing at times. Other than this and a few little mistakes I thought it was great. A smile is a god ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Werewolf Story

    Hello, my edits will be in red... Prologue I watched as the moon rose slowly over the horizon. The moonlight tickled my skin and filled me with limitless energy. My ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: S.E.R.E.N.A

    Hello Serena, I like this poem, its been a while since I have read an acrostic so this made a nice change. Gold Star for that. I really liked the ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Four Letters

    Hello, I am forced to agree with Conrad and WD for this one. The 4 letter word pattern worked really well but without a theme it just didn't gel. I ...

    Jan 12, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: It's Medical

    Hello, I like this and it definately makes me want to read more of it. Again I didn't get how she could be so calm, unless theres something that I'm ...

    Jan 12, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Two Souls

    Hello, I thought I'd look at your post because you looked at myn so here goes... Well I like the idea, you can tell that you really like your characters ...

    Jan 11, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Bloodlust & Bloodloss chapter 1

    Hello, Carly. I really like your idea, and I think you pulled it off really well. As this is a first draft I won't go into reems and reems about ...

    Jan 11, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Black Rose-Chapter 1

    Hello, Nice to meet you. This is what I found when reading your chapter the bits in red are my comments ok here goes... :) I put my earphones on, ...

    Jan 10, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: World collided

    Hello, I like the idea for the story although I thought it dragged a bit because of the every day mundane human stuff. My one major problem with it, is ...

    Jan 10, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Short Story: The Enchanter's House

    I love the witty humour with moving cutlery and the cat. I only have one complaint, you described everything very well up until the end were you justa flung the ...

    Jan 10, 2010


And then, as if written by the hand of a bad novelist, an incredible thing happened.
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