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Re: Pay Heed!
Hello, I'm Lydia and I will be you reviewer today, Firstly I will start off by saying that I thought you did a very good job with the old English. ...
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: A Man Walks Through My House
Hello, :D I have read your short story the enchanted house and I can now see where you got your inspiration from. I like this poem though the rhythm was ...
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: what can you see
Awwww, I liked it, so yeah it was a bit cheesy but hey it was well written. It was exceotionally cute so a gold star for you. I love the ...
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: The Lions
Hello, I liked this but I thought it was a bit of a broken rhythm because you broke off the sentences before they finished and used another line. However I ...
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: Finders, Keepers
Hello, I really liked this (apart from the info dump in the middle! :P) Other than that I thought it was a quirky little story that I really enjoyed! Well ...
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: Your Smile
I agree with July, your rhyming scheme can be confusing at times. Other than this and a few little mistakes I thought it was great. A smile is a god ...
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: Werewolf Story
Hello, my edits will be in red... Prologue I watched as the moon rose slowly over the horizon. The moonlight tickled my skin and filled me with limitless energy. My ...
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: S.E.R.E.N.A
Hello Serena, I like this poem, its been a while since I have read an acrostic so this made a nice change. Gold Star for that. I really liked the ...
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: Four Letters
Hello, I am forced to agree with Conrad and WD for this one. The 4 letter word pattern worked really well but without a theme it just didn't gel. I ...
Jan 12, 2010 -
Re: It's Medical
Hello, I like this and it definately makes me want to read more of it. Again I didn't get how she could be so calm, unless theres something that I'm ...
Jan 12, 2010 -
Re: Two Souls
Hello, I thought I'd look at your post because you looked at myn so here goes... Well I like the idea, you can tell that you really like your characters ...
Jan 11, 2010 -
Re: Bloodlust & Bloodloss chapter 1
Hello, Carly. I really like your idea, and I think you pulled it off really well. As this is a first draft I won't go into reems and reems about ...
Jan 11, 2010 -
Re: Black Rose-Chapter 1
Hello, Nice to meet you. This is what I found when reading your chapter the bits in red are my comments ok here goes... :) I put my earphones on, ...
Jan 10, 2010 -
Re: World collided
Hello, I like the idea for the story although I thought it dragged a bit because of the every day mundane human stuff. My one major problem with it, is ...
Jan 10, 2010 -
Re: Short Story: The Enchanter's House
I love the witty humour with moving cutlery and the cat. I only have one complaint, you described everything very well up until the end were you justa flung the ...
Jan 10, 2010
