Lydia1995

Hey there HockeyFan! I'm here to review - this time hopefully it won't get deleted! Right so you know the drill, nit-picks first and then general comments. “Mandi, do you ...

Hi there Storyguy! I'm Lydia and I'm here to review your piece. I hope I don't say anything which offends you but if I do feel free to totally disregard ...

Hi there! I'm Lydia and I'm here to review your chapter! :) I'll start by saying that I really liked this! I'm going to go through with nit-picks first and ...

Hey there, I'm Lydia, here to review! This is a redraft right? I liked it, it was very gripping and I definitely wanted to read more - so when you ...

Hello there! It's Lydia here to review! This was quite a long piece - in future you should really post one chapter per topic or it put's people off reviewing. ...

Hi there! I'm here to review. Firstly I'd like to say that I really enjoyed your first chapter! I won't bother too much about the nitpicky things as I'm sure ...

Haha :lol: I loved this and really enjoyed it :D You gave me a good laugh and it is also a rally interesting idea! I almost wish it were true ...

Hey Mello :) I really enjoyed your poem I LOVE the imagery it really works :) I have a few little nit-picky comments to make though first :) A blank ...

Hey, I really enjoyed your poem :) I thought you dealt well with the rhyme scheme - it didn't deem forced in anyway. But I agree with Jasmine in that ...

Hey :) I agree with the other two - you definately need punctuation or if no punctuation then your lines need to feel like they have a natural end. Which ...

Hey Ire :) Firstly let me start by saying that I like the ideas behind your piece. I can relate to that idea and almost need to fit in and ...

Hey Justagirl :) Firstly to say I really like this :) And from this I can conclude that HAIKU'S DO LIKE YOU! :D One thing though the structure of a ...

Hey Secret! First I'll just say welcome to YWS seeings as you are quite new here :) Anyway onto your poem. I liked it especially this line: a dream of ...

Hey Kagi! Wow, that was a very short story haha :) But I actually like it, it's nice and simple and that's a good thing it allows for us to ...

Hi Karzkin, pleasure to meet you :) I really enjoyed your poem! I loved the vocabulary you used and I also liked the repetition of the last two lines in ...