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Thanks for the review! :)

Thanks for the review and follow! :)

Yes, that's it! Sensory details! I was feeling as if this story was missing something, and that is it. It's been driving me crazy, so I'm glad you pointed that ...

I'm not an easily offended person and can take criticism and feedback, so don't worry about being harsh. I much prefer a review like this to something sugar-coated. Also, thanks ...

No worries - nitpicks aren't what I'm mainly concerned about. ;) I pretty much agree with everything you've said. Pacing is something I need to work at - I feel ...

Hi SunsetTree! I grew up on a farm and I agree - farmers are very up to date on technology. It's actually rather amazing. That wasn't really the point, but ...

Thanks! The whole thing was supposed to be from the tomb, but I can see how I conveyed that badly lol. I'll probably rewrite this/expand on this someday.

Hi PastelSlushie, thanks for the review! I do agree, this is too short (and it's missing several elements) of a short story. It's more of an idea that I am ...

Thanks! This is really just an idea that I might expand upon in the future. It's inspired by the sleeping hero legends and King Tut (both of which I find ...

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it :)

Hi RainaDee - thanks for the review! The irony was that it was going to rain whether or not he committed suicide. He was probably a bit on the crazy ...

Thanks for the review! The twist isn't that he died, it was that it was going to rain whether or not he committed suicide, hence the funeral and the news ...

Nah, you're review isn't harsh. I have a pretty thick skin, and I appreciate honesty in all forms. Anyway, I was pretty iffy about this story and was feeling kind ...

Your review is definitely not too harsh - I love feedback like this! Honestly, this story was just an experiment and I probably won't write much horror in the future. ...

Thanks for the review and congrats on the review star!! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :) Emma would be in foster care - I will add that to the ...