Lulu93

First of all, your words flowed well and your grammar, unlike a lot of people's, was good. The story seemed interesting. I was a little disappointed at where you ended ...

Your writing style is very good. It kept me interested. However, I was confused by the characters, they kind of seemed to be thrown in at random times. I think ...

TO start, it's an interesting story line but so very cliche. A pretty girl is not pretty enough to be a popular so she gets made fun of. I think ...

I wasn't bored reading this it all, however there were several grammatical and spelling errors. I also think that in order to be a very catchy first chapter, you might ...