LukeStarkiller

I really like this poem. There's some very good imagery in there, and it was a good idea to slow down the act of falling into the literary equivalent of ...

This chapter is great! It moves along at a pretty brisk pace, it's very engaging, and I thought it was pretty well-written. I have a couple of the customary-in-my-reviews nitpicks ...

Great chapter! You did a great job of keeping things moving, even throughout the long areas of description, which isn't often easy to do. I think that overall, it would ...

I enjoyed this chapter very much. It's interesting how much the novel has progressed from being heavily focused on music in the first chapter to having a high-school drama subplot ...

Well done! I enjoyed this piece very much. It has a frantic quality to it, as if the dog (narrator) is trying to get as many words out in as ...

Not a bad start! I think the theater scene was very well-done, and you set it up really well in the first paragraph. You made some grammar mistakes that took ...

This is very, very good. It's always appreciated when a writer can do two valuable things at once like you do here: you have ideas that are compelling and worth ...

Well done! You did a great job of getting the reader invested in the characters even without much characterization. This prologue flows well and serves as a great hook for ...

I had a blast, as usual, reading one of your chapters, and I get a strong sense that you know exactly where the story is going at this point. There ...

Well done! I really enjoyed reading this chapter. Here are some general comments I have, since there isn't much specific that is wrong with it. I am already invested in ...

Very nice! You're clearly a pro at making character motivation understandable and emotionally resonant. I actually like that it's a short chapter because it gives you the time to get ...

I'd like to start by saying that I haven't read the first few chapters of this, so my comments won't be on plot or character because I have little context ...

This is a brilliant work, but to the average reader (me), it's a bit incoherent, and I think a little bit of editing would fix that. Let's start with your ...

I think you're very good at establishing a mood with your selective description. With only a few details about the town, for example, I feel like I've stayed there for ...

Incredible! Your description is clearly something you pride yourself on, and it definitely pays off. It never feels forced or too much, but the reader gets such striking images in ...