LukeStarkiller

The concepts that you're dealing with here fascinate me, and I think you expressed the problems that arise when contemplating a world that, in the grand scheme of things, doesn't ...

I like this story a lot. You play Azarel's love of the Bible against Lena's drunkenness very well. The capitalization of Him was cool as well and worked well with ...

I love how lyrical this piece is. A couple of lines stood out to me as being incredibly well-crafted: "A belief of a large cosmic order governing the wild chaotic ...

I agree with a lot of the things BlueAfrica has said. Your characters are certainly compelling, and you could clearly have them bounce off each other for pages and pages ...

Good work! This was very well-written, and even not having read any of the previous chapters, I understood what was happening very well. I really like Tiffany's internal conflict in ...

Even not having read Part 1 of this short story, I did enjoy this. It certainly is intriguing, and I'm excited about future installments. There were a couple of glaring ...

This piece was fascinating to me, in a very good way. You did a good job of making me question the "modern gods" in my life, and I commend you ...

Very good! I really enjoyed your exploration of this premise. I'd never considered writing about a religious person's interview with God, and you did it really well here. I do ...

I really like this piece. Endlessly inventive; in fact, I think you even cram too many jokes into under a thousand words. My advice is going to overlap with Carina's, ...

Just like Part One, this is endlessly inventive. I love the way you poke fun at the conventions of TV and the media in general in a way that isn't ...

This is fantastic. Just so flat-out entertaining, and most of this is due to your hilarious and original premise. You should really label this as a satire (in addition to ...

Fabulous work! It's hard to "write chemistry" between people, but you did a very good job here. My favorite line is "God Elle, it was like a slap in the ...

Wow! This really blew me away. I think horror is very hard to do, especially this kind of more contemplative version, and you really pulled it off. As for general ...

Fantastic work. It does what it's trying to do really well, and it was a very entertaining read. I especially love the [esquire] add-in, and your descriptions are specific enough ...

This story is pretty hard to pass judgment on. I did enjoy reading it and it kept me very entertained, but in the other hand, it has some big flaws ...