LoyalDay

This pieces was really well done and there wasn't that much wrong with it. I like the diction that you used in this and was very hooked since the beginning. ...

Love the story, it was so well thought of and the characters were well rounded, that we get a feel of what their personalities are. So yeah, nice story start! ...

I like the concept of the poem, you stated what the poem was about without directly saying it. The point of view used was clear, though had to read it ...

Wow! This was a real eye opener for someone who already knew that things like this could still happen. While reading, I couldn't help but notice that "A perment solution ...

I must say this short story was really sweet and I loved it so much that I smiled at the screen. The way you described things was great that I ...

So after reading, I had realized that I love this story and wish for more but some certain points came up, that probably should be clean up a bit (But ...

Upon reading, there were some sentences that felt as though they were run-on sentences or fragmented. An example would be "People lived...eventually millions", the wording you used was great and ...

This prologue is very interesting and you have succeeded in bringing a new taste to characters, who are trapped in a ended world. However, I must say that there are ...