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Mommy and daddy would be fine -- that's something that even adults use sometimes, as you mentioned. However, the rest of the words in combination, "blankie" especially, give it a ...

^^ Apologies. I've said it before and I'll say it again, I am far too literal for poetry to even begin to penetrate my skull. I am trying to expand ...

XD That would be some very horrible cotton candy then, I would imagine. Let me amend my previous metaphor. Snow then. Appropriate since it's regarding a rather cold topic and ...

Cheeeeeaater. XD You're too awesome Aet.

That would work. ^^ And the 'why them?' sparked something else to think about. Why any one at all? Was this just some move for a Utopian world? Or was ...

^^ The expected lifespans for humans has only gone up with technology and hygiene. 120 should definitely be possible in the future. Once upon a time, the average lifespan was ...

Ah, many many thanks. I shall begin work editing immediately. I've already begun to work on the things that Snoink and Pengu pointed out, and you guys are awesome for ...

I need to capture the essence of confusion, but not to stir people away because they don't understand it. ^^ Tricky balance, lol. But a very excellent hook if done ...

^^ Talking heads And I'm not saying add just description, though that's a big part of it. Just write it like you plan to write the rest of the novel. ...

0.o Well that's new! I'll see if I can find it next time I'm at B&N. (My gosh, my list is getting long! XD I might need to take a ...

Ack, pesky tenses. Try writing a story in anything other than past tense, and they'll give you a field day. :P For the first part, I was writing it in ...

Gah! I mixed up your avatars. Painfully ashamed of myself. *shakes head* Sorry, Angel. I'm an airhead. But still. This is awesome. XD Sticky, I say!

Allo! "Hey Peyton, do you think he realises he just said 'goodnight' instead on 'good afternoon' in Spanish?" " I chuckled, and glanced at the clock. “I know! It's three ...

Fixed.