Lost_in_dreamland

Hey there, Kirsten here, I second Jon's kudoses for trying something different. :D Anyway, let's go over the poem and then we'll do the comments. xD Beautiful, Silver, Humongous Birds, ...

I've not been on YWS in a while, so my review's probably not going to be good :lol: anyway, let us first deal with the actual poem, then I'll go ...

I like it too. It's short and simple, it carries meaning without being too deep and it doesn't beat around the bush with huge descriptions. That said, it's lovely for ...

Evi :) I've been gone for ages :( so here's Kirsten's first review in ages :) Let's start with the actual piece of writing [quote]The flower was drenched in teardrops. ...

I don't have enough time to do a real critique just now :( So I'm going to do one of those annoying nit-picky things, then I'll come back later and ...

Hey there, JC I was requested, so here I come ;) 'Kay, I shall not critique grammar etc, 'cuz you said you didn't want me to. xD I'm afraid this ...

June. xD I promised you I'd review this, and I am here ;) So, let's start on the very first poem... bearing in mind that I am terrible at reviewing ...

Personally, I think this poem would be really great if you made this the first stanza, then do a second not asking questions, but answering them, and maybe a third, ...

[quote]dont don't be afraid my dear comma Even if you're not going to capitalize all your first letters, you still need to capitalize some pronouns. Example: I i am here ...

I walked into the air- conditioned mall, already smelling the deep- fried corn dogs in the food court. I walked thru through the mall, it was loud from the chattering ...

Hey there, I'm Kirsten ;) What I loved about this poem was the flow. It flowed really well, and the rhyme wasn't forced either. xD The imagery was great in ...

Right, well this was the random piece of fiction at the top of the page, so even though it was ages ago that you posted this, and you probably don't ...

Hey Evi, I'm Kirsten ;) welcome to YWS :) You were the random piece at the top of the page, so I come faithfully to review ;) one I adored ...

Right, you were zee random piece at the top of the page, so here I am ;) Nit-picks first :( I treat people with hospitality, one Cleary saying "Welcome to ...

Hey there Hayley :P You were the random piece at the top, so here I am ;) Let's start with an analysis of your poem. xD If you think of ...