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I thought this was good but it was a little repetative(sorry but I just want to tell you) And I think you should capitalize your "I"s. It would look more ...

I liked this. I liked the way you used short stanzas and the way you kept describing the fire along the way. Cool! One little thing though: As I stare ...

I agree with everyone else. It was beatifully written and mysterious and dark and just over all...brilliant. I lved the first stanza too. It makes you want to read on. ...

I think this is a brilliant prologue. It's beautifully described. I love this paragraph= “Earth.” A voice that sounded like the wind whispering through petals and the howls of a ...

Cool! If that song came out I'd buy it! Wow! :D :D :D

Wow! I love this poem. Its very descriptive and it tells a story. Not many poems can do that but you pulled it off. Well done!!!! :lol: :D :) :D ...

Can I just say one thing? After someone speaks you use a comma before you put in the speech marks. Example "How are you today Emma?,"asked laura. See the comma. ...

I think your title is good and your poem is very good and descriptive, keep it up, you've definitely got a talent! :D :D :D

Wow, you're a very good writer! :lol: :lol: :lol: