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Re: The Quest
Look over spelling again. "He heard his parents talking. He tiptoed on his wood floor so his parents couldn’t here him" Fix capitalization " Then They started off to the ...
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Re: The story about china
I wonder if you could have used paragraphs. I wonder if you could give context as to where shen lives or why he wanted to be a part of the ...
Mar 14, 2016 -
Re: ESCAPE O THE GAZELLE
Fix spacing here. "But today I wish if one of us was killed that we would atleast have an investigation." I wonder if you could Given more Characterization in the ...
Mar 14, 2016 -
Re: The Night I lit the sky on fire
I wonder if you could double check punctuation for example "DON’T” screamed the Mongol captain. One single word. One single motive: to stay alive. The lantern swung loosely in my ...
Mar 14, 2016