LlamaDuck

Wow i really liked this, it was strange and made me think. Here are my favourite parts... Long he stood and pondered on what he thought was true. The past ...

Hey, LlamaDuck here. Sorry for this... I am always near you but alas, Nice line! You do not see, feel, smell or hear me. This felt a bit long I ...

Hmm! Okay a bit short, not that there is anything wrong with it it's a lovely piece full of good description and words I'm not to sure I know the ...

Wow! As you can tell I really liked this poem and I'm a little creeped out by it...I'm guessing that was the idea. Your darkest dreams will never be, far ...

A few small catches... I woke up in the and climbed out of bed, I think you missed a word... I went into our shower, the floors were dirty. How ...

Just a few things, here you say Aaron's hair is brown... she could see the tip of Aaron’s baseball cap, jammed tight over his head of brown hair. ...and all ...

Just one thing... The way they argued... you'd think they were fighting the war I think this should say 'you'd think they were still fighting' So now i wonder... who ...

Love the poem but I just felt like saying a few things (sorry about this). It's on the streets, In people you meet, Even in those heartless souls. - Like ...

... I liked this it had a good rhythm but then you changed in the next verse and it slowed down a bit ... I think this line was to ...

I think this is a really good idea for a story though i also think it needs a little work. There were some parts that i felt you could have ...