Livinginfantasy

Me likey! Me likey alot! A few suggestions though, which can be found in red: Look at the lines on your hands You'll see a story there, The insignia engraved ...

The cut up lines are meant to mimic a heart beat. It's four in the morning and I'm waking for my daily dose of failure pills and guilt medicine. Dizzy, ...

I like this. You have great word choice... but there are certain places where this can be improved, in my opinion. Comments and suggestions in red! She wondered the lonely ...

ok, so, this poem was created by me when I was a couple years younger, and I honestly think that it is completely cheesy and genious all at the same ...

This is great! I started taking notes and I realized it would be better to just do this: I always had the feeling that I was cursed. Bad things just ...

Basically, you are contradicting the way he thinks, and only an author can do it. I know you want me to fix the grammatical errors but you cannot change the ...

How interesting... I love this chick! I don't know why, she's just awesome. Is she some type of angel or something? Anywho, I like this alot. Is there more? I ...

Poem The Poets hand quivers- With thoughts on edge of pen The world upon their shoulders- And races to begin. Beautiful intro. I know the feeling! They fling words onto ...

:edit: You just can't grasp the concept, I am what I am, No gimmicks, No labels And no one understands, The way I was then, Isn't the same as now ...

I have to agree with OnCeUpOnAtIm3Xo... your story is too fast paced and you do need more character development. But I did find this quite humorous. Especially when he peed ...

Hey kris. Comments in bold! Are all evils inherent, as something waiting innate? Or be wickedness a skill, As something learnt by free will? I like the first question, but ...

That was good! You do have some puncuation issues, but nothing that can't be fixed over a another read. Beautiful. It felt like a child was seeing the monster come ...

Hey Took! Glad to see another new member. Syte already reminded you of the rules, so I don't have to... but just remember that! That way everything here runs smoothly. ...

Hey Gahks! I've always seen you around, yet I've never gotten the chance to review anything from you. I guess today is my lucky day! I really can't give anything ...

This was posted in 2007 and there are no reviews? Well, that's a shame. I'll review for you! I used to be apart of the world of the living, but ...