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I loved the 'Scrape a knee, break a bone' intro, but the repeating of 'that doesn't hurt' really irratated me. In my opinion, repetition works in some cases, but this ...

I think you should change the title. I feel it really doesn't do justice to this beautiful poem. Now I must admit, it is a little cliche, but being a ...

Odd? Yes. Is it bad? No way!! This was very intriguing. I guess that's the right word. What I really liked was the stucture and word choice. Also, your intro ...

The rhythm's a little off, but I thought this was the cutest poem! I love your word choice. Your parents will just watch in awe, As I prove you are ...

I know there's a movie called Waiting to Exhale, though I've never seen it, and the title captured my interest. So I wrote something. And gave it that title. Just ...

First I would like to say that I almost missed out on this. I was about to skip it cause it was too lengthy, but then I saw KJ's post, ...

The topic is alright. What I really liked was the flow. I suggest you try clearing up on punctuation. Some lines seem as if they need periods instead of commas, ...

I like the message. What I didn't like was the irregular rhythm and the words in caps. You should try choosing different words and adding a little more to keep ...

I loved it. I love you're character Aurora. She's just the kind of girl I'd hang out with! I love your organization as well. It isn't full of complete sentences ...

That was beautiful! I love how it began with 'she only got two hours', it really hooked me. It didn't seem fair, To lose such a precious thing , One ...

:shock: woah! That was brilliant! don’t let me die in silence. cut me open, let the bright freshness of my blood submerge the white darkness of this empty room. use ...

The steps went wrong. The music turned sour. Yet he still smiled, and I believed in his power. I really liked these lines. It's very visual. It's what I want, ...

The stranger smiled, and leaning in, gave me a name, as precious as kin. I happily smiled back, and closed my old eyes, and stopped breathing and was still, as ...

WOW! :shock: This is great! you pulled it off with such grace, I almost forgot you were being conceited. After re-reading it, I noticed the little message in between the ...

That was really nice! Being a Naruto lover I was really eager to read this. And you didn't dissapoint me. As another person said, 'eyes full of loneliness' shouldn't have ...