Lithor

Thanks, Masq! This really helps! I'm not sure what happened to those missing "a"s and "the"s. I imported my story from a document, so maybe so formatting issues came about, ...

Thank you! Happy Review Day too!

Thank you so much for your comment! It really means a lot to me! For sure I will change the genre. I cannot thank you enough for warning me about ...

Thx! And thanks for your follow, too. I'm new here, so I'm glad I'm getting good feedback from my readers! :)

Thx!

Thanks for your advice. I'll keep that in mind. Like I said, I imported this from a word document created I have no idea HOW long ago. Some things I ...

I see what you mean, Sunkissed. Industrialization is a favorite topic of mine, and I saw it throughout your piece! You have a good sense of mystery and imagination! I ...

Wonderful poem! At first your poem was very inceptual at the start. I feel kind of bad but I chuckled when you said "Time, why time, had made me old." ...

Nice! I like the personification the "note" voice developed over time.

Wow! What a touching story. Cue applause. I loved the letter format you used. The way you presented every stage of the girl's life was incredible. I see nothing wrong ...

Really really interesting. I like your ingenuity and perfect grasp of the dreamworld. Well done!

Wow! I can tell you put as much effort into writing this review as I did writing my short! Thank you so much for your input. I will be sure ...

Really great start so far! I loved the variation of characters, especially Maryl's personality. My suggestion to you is to use A LOT of descriptive adjectives. But, what do I ...