LindseyBrooke

Hullo! The name's Lindsey. (; Let's start with the review, shall we? The incredible feeling of the life draining away. This is a fragment. Try to stay away from those. ...

Hi, I'm Lindsey! I'll be quoting the whole story if you don't mind. (: Nelly Miller was seventy five and very, very ill when she sold the property and moved ...

Hi! Please allow me to introduce myself, I'm Lindsey. Haha, so let's begin with the review. I'll start with my nitpicks first. “Don’t be nervous, honey. Everything will be fine ...

Hello! My name is Lindsey and I shall be reviewing your story. (: So, let's begin. He maintained it quite nicely, despite the driver’s seat being a tad broken and ...

Hello! My name is Lindsey and I shall be reviewing your work today! Keep in mind that I'm only trying to help you and make you better! Ok, now I'll ...

Hiya! Suddenly , something caught his eye and he staggered back onto the rocks[s],[/s] . H e had thought he was alone, but found that he was not. Her long ...

Hello! I dreamed the most beautiful of dreams. My love, you were there too. I don't know. This sentence seems a little off. Maybe say something like, "I dreamed the ...

Thirteen Reasons Why by Jay Asher. It may not have been the best writing one might have seen, but the story is so touching. It's a depressing book, but Jay ...

Hello! I just want to say welcome to YWS and point out a couple things. When you post a story or chapter, you have to review at least two other ...

2nd Chapter! Woot! =] Jen shrugged. “ W ell, I better get to chemistry.” Just capitalize the W. I sat down in the front where everyone usually avoided, just in ...

Hey! A story of the unbreakable bond between two hearts. How is their love unbreakable? Exemplify their love instead of just telling us. Also, you are describing Matthew's personality, but ...

Hola! I'm actually really impressed because I read the whole thing. =] I really enjoyed this story. There were only a couple things I had problems with. Cathy was a ...

Hello! The last day he would [s]every[/s] ever see her smile. But unfortunately today was the last day he would see her unharmed. I didn't quite understand this. Are you ...

Hello! This story is good, but you need to change a couple things. The wispy , cold winds of the blistery morning ran through his brown hair, coiling it around ...