LilyJamey

Edited after much consideration. Yay! A gold star!! Actually, the note was supposed to include how her dad died and her uncle cut them off, but it sounded so corny ...

The Millenium Girl. I hated it. Period. Fools Die caught me in the first two pages and lost me in the next ten. Moll Flanders is boring. As is Joss ...

Whoa! Too long. I won't read the whole piece. You need to divide it into chapters, darl, or everyone will be scared away by the length. I'll come back when ...

Whoa! Review influx! Kiki: I decided to keep all the sentences in past tense. Thanks for pointing out the extremely embarassing "all" - I forgot to erase that! Writerbabe: Relax. ...

Ah, another review while I was away! I'm just throwing in a personal opinion here. In the earlier sentences of this paragraph, Felicity seems truly bad for her mother. These ...

I thought I'd drop by since there's no homework today... Yay! 2 reviews! FLyerS: Just edited a part to make it clearer. It actually states "a girl who was once ...

Yup. Pent: Confined in a pen, imprisoned. Thanks for the review too! Cheers, Lily.

Thanks! I changed the weird line into something more likely. I think I should go to sleep now, anyway. This was kind of based on my own clinical depression when ...

Thanks for that, I almost forgot the name of the book... My sister recommends Something Wonderful. I haven't read it though.

I guess you can't really say "got it back", since she never had it to begin with. She's an achromatopsiatic, or total colour blindness. Kind of like seeing everything in ...

I have more to add to the list. "Fasting, Feasting", by Anita Desai. It's a book which paints the Indian community well, but it got me all jumbled up because ...

Also, the narrator doesn't even mention how much she likes him, besides "He was the most amazing person I had ever laid eyes on," which is ironic since the narrator ...

Yay! A critique! Ok, I edited it. The beginning is pretty much necessary, because it ends the same way. I was looking at the glass table behind me when I ...

Aw, thanks... Actually (God, I love that word!), this was a random excerpt from my long-abandoned HP fan fic. I trashed it years ago, but it isn't easy to let ...

Okay, I added more info on the man. Not sure how to give out his name though. I also put in more detail. Thanks for the stuff about decapitation. Many ...