Lilac_Wood

I can see you're paying attention to the advice you were given in the first two parts :) It just keeps getting better and better, so, yes, definitely keep writing! ...

Looking good, all in all :) Poking at some grammar... This is something I used to do a lot. I still have to watch for it in my own writing. ...

I really liked this :) Just a few suggestions: In the beginning, you have a lot of "was" sentences. Using the same structure in sentence after sentence can sort of ...

This draws me in more than the first part did. It's got me asking questions. Why are these brothers fighting? Who will win, and what will happen because of it? ...

You're right, it is very short. One question: By tavern, did you mean cavern? I suppose a tavern could have sacred tombs, but a cavern would be the more likely ...