Light_Devil

Okay first things first; there were no capitals and it burnt my eyes out to read this. The decription was childish and there very barely any adjectives or adverbs. I ...

I think Seeminglymeaningless has a point, I don't think anybody would ever even talk to someone who had that much rumours floating around them. Let alone meet with them and ...

This is interesting, nothing grammatically wrong with it or spelling wise. I feel sympathetic for the main character and I want to know more about Bo. I have a feeling ...

OMG! I can't believe no one has even replied! This story is amazing! It is pyshicologically intriguing! I'm hooked to it! Amazing! There are little teeny mistake sthat I could ...

Okay, well. I am at a complete loss. Utterly amazingly lost. What reason has the adopted son have for killing his parents? And family? The relationship between them doesn't make ...

Squall has a point. This piece is well-written, but there wasn't any real point in this short story. There really isn't anything to say. It was a simple thing to ...

This is a wonderful piece of writing. I enjoyed it. I love it how the character took the leap at the end. Nothing grammatically wrong to point out, as the ...

That was a good read. I think you accidentally missed an enter space at Honolulu - 2010. Overall I loved the way that this person grew, slowly, but you could ...

Hmmm, that's really strange. I read your story after reading this one And I couldn't help, but notice the similarities. Odd, huh? I enjoyed this, but sometimes, where you have ...

I enjoyed reading this, no grammar mistakes, nothing particularly wrong with spelling and a great attitude. The attitude that this person conveys; makes me feel like he has a trash ...

Wow. I am at a loss to even try to desribe how awe inspired I feel currently. I am amazed at how good this story was. I . . . ...

Okay well . . . I think I'll go through this with you step by step. Not trying to be mean, but that's just the way things work better for ...

Okay. I like this story and the plot, but . . . You totally lost me where you kept changing POVs. It is kind of . . . how shall ...

I'd just like to point out that the title to this story is "Shooing Star". I was wondering, if in fact you meant to write was "Shoo t ing Star"? ...

I absolutely loved this. There are few flaws, such as spelling errors here and there,but I fully enjoyed this story. The poem was beautiful as well. Ahh, I don't think ...