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Re: Death
Interesting. I like this, but . . . There are a few grammar, tense and spelling mistakes. I am interested as to where this is going, but I imagine that ...
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: Untouched
Personally, I think this is short and sweet. Ahhh, but you said to be harsh so . . . I have a few things to point out. I'm going to ...
Jul 11, 2009 -
Re: Compass of Time - Ch1
The glass was so cold; water droplets ran down it creating patterns that weaved together in intricate designs. Blythe’s thumb ran along the side of the glass, creating the squealing ...
Jul 10, 2009 -
Re: I Need You To Write. - 1. Part 2.
I enjoy your writing style, but I have to point a few things out. Well, just two (lol, ^^") It was strange and bazaar, those sudden black and red dots ...
May 30, 2009 -
Re: The Ram
I like this piece, it puts so many images into my head. ^^ I almost feel sorry for the man, but it was his fault, but then again it was ...
Dec 16, 2008 -
Re: The Garden
*sighs, then begins to cry* I wish I could write like this. This story just absorbed my total attention from start to finish. Amazing, really - fascinating and totally wonderful. ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: starting something
OMG! Wow, this is a wonderful story and I really would like to read the rest. There's nothing grammatically wrong correct to fix up and I think it's mostly fine ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: Cassidy
“Cassidy, I know you’re not happy about this but think of the possibility." The only tihng I could find wrong in this whole entire piece - you forgot a comma ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: Untitled, chapter 1
Wow, this story is amazing. There are grammar mistakes which I can poke at and no typos either. This an interesting piece and I ind myslef wanting to know more ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: Destiny
Okay, before I even read this I have to tell you to fix up you use of entering - its abominable and deterring to readers and reviewers. The book I ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: Peter#1
I love where this is going. I don't know where the fan-fic of this is going to be tied in, but by all means this really doesn't need it! I ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: The Heist -- Chapter 1
The moment that would change Daniel Clarkson's life forever occurred one cold morning on December the 27th. For the past eight years of his fifteen year long life, he had ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: Death of Night, Birth of Day
Wow. I don't know why no one has reviwed this yet, so I will. I really enjoyed this poem and how it keeps it consistent about the night and dark. ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: Soulmate
fire touched tongue licking, Now, I love the imagery that this made in my mind. grasping for air I like this part as well - both "gasping" and "grasping" fit ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: "Monica."
Wow, this is a beautiful piece. I feel extremely moved. There are no grammatical errors and no spelling mistakes. All in all this piece was lovely and it made me ...
Nov 23, 2008
