Liaya

Wow. As someone who has personally experienced the numbness and fatigue of depression, and as a writer, I think you capture both with exquisite accuracy. I love your comparison of ...

So I'm going to jump right into the critique, because then I can point out mistakes as I find them. I hope you don't mind. Here goes! Your second sentence ...

"Plz tear apart." What a dangerous way to post a story. Here goes! :) First off, I think something this piece could really benefit from is some more vocal inflection. ...

Aah! I was already feeling lonely and this made it worse ~ But I'm more glad my brother is home and soon to be leaving the marines and I don't ...

I really, really, really love this. It IS beautiful. I'm not going to try picking it apart or anything -- sorry, I know most find that kind of thing useful ...

Oooh, that's dark. That's not a bad thing though -- it's sort of cool. I'm curious to know how much of this is meant to be figurative or metaphorical and ...

I LOVE THIS!!! It's really, really beautiful, and I don't think I've ever read anything that explained how I felt before, at least not towards this kind of thing. Your ...

Beautiful!! I love it. I love the way you start out speaking of light and joy and innocence, then explain how that innocence fades and you start to see the ...

Noo, you can't end there! I wasn't done reading yet! :'( PLEASE keep it coming! I'm loving it so far. Your writing flows beautifully and I'm really enjoying your characters ...

Okay, so my first thought is, "Can they really be so gullible?" Just having a principal come announce that there's a zombie apocalypse would sound like a prank to most ...

YES. THIS IS IT. EXACTLY. THANK YOU FOR VOICING MY OPINIONS!! I'm so tired of the whole vampire romance--why beat a dead horse? A rare few vampire romance novels may ...

Okay! I'm reviewing now! I actually really like this. I don't know a whole lot about military operations or anything like that, but it FELT authentic. It was a little ...

Okay…this is a little disturbing. I guess it's not my type of poem, so I apologize about that. Looking at it from a technical standpoint, however, it's really quite good. ...

So I haven't read your first chapter. . .sorry. . .but I rather think I'll try to when I have time, because I'm really curious about this "Charles" character as ...