Letty467

Kamas has pretty much pointed out everything I was going to say XD It is a good poem, it has some quite immature rhyming but that can be easily fix. ...

Soft and original. it's interesting how you made the first and last line in each stanza rhyme but the syllabols dont flow. to make a successfull rhyme you must indicate ...

I can't help but feel as if you need to work more on the emphasis of the syllables. take note: ma ry had a lit tle lamb (7) it's fleece ...

It's good in a imaginative way, but I can't help but feel there's no poetry in this poem... if you can understand what I mean... What I mean by that ...