Lena.Wooldridge

Hey there! This was very beautiful and heart warming, I have to say. Like the other reviewer, I'm a sucker for a good historical fiction as well. I'm also working ...

First off, this should be in "Fanfiction," not general fiction. The language in this was very beautiful. To be honest, I like the way it is written, for the most ...

I would recommend putting what Ophelia says in the dreams either into quotation marks or italicizing them, so it makes them easier to read. There were a quite a few ...

The semicolon in the beginning of the second paragraph is used incorrectly. I really like how you touched on the topic of Barbies, because I can totally relate to that ...

First off, remember that the quotations are to be put in standard quotation marks ( " " ), not the [ quote ] option on the sidebar when you post. ...

Hey! This is very nice, I just have to make a couple remarks. His pleads for me Should be "pleas" bed was so warm and comfortable that i didn't move ...

Due to the detail of this piece and the emotion enclosed within it, I'm assuming that it is at least a partially true story. If so, I'm very sorry that ...

This whole story didn't seem all that realistic. This seems more like a mafia world, not a drug world. Low-level coke and weed dealers know better than to shoot a ...

This was a very cute and cheerful story. I especially liked the ending, when everyone in the school ends up nice :) There were a few tense errors throughout the ...

Just stopping by quickly. I had every intention of reading this... Until I saw how long it was. If you want people to actually read your entire story, you need ...

First off, I can totally relate to everything that this is written about. The main problem I have with this is all of the grammatical errors. There is an extreme ...

The only issue I found was that you continuously said his name. When you are actually talking or writing to someone, you would never repeat their name so many times. ...

It is impossible to fully explain a man/woman's life in only a few short paragraphs. This could be made interesting if you were to spend more time going into a ...

Kira winced as the sound Not a good idea to begin with talking about "the sound" when we have no idea what "the sound" is. "The sound" acts almost as ...

I think that in your attempt to prove your proficiency as a writer you succeeded in created something that ultimately says and accomplishes nothing. The entire point of writing is ...