Leja

I think it's a bit too dark. But I like the color ideas! Can you lighten them up any way?

Thank you, Evangelina ^_^ I feel like it's too short. But I've already made my point? I s'ppose I could add some scenery stuff for effect. Anyone have opinions?

I'm ba-ack; hehe Part Three Immediately the hinge of his jaw constricted at the tart flavor, the skin cracking as he chewed. It was not unlike the jaw-clenching taste of ...

I've changed the title! Thanks, xanthan and Clau! "skip the change and close the frame": that's me mixing partner dance terminology with my love for likening everything to the film ...

This is too general and going in too many directions for it to be an effective poem. I'd suggest picking one stanza (specifically, one of the middle two) and going ...

Many people edit changes right into the original. If it's very, very, drastically different, sometimes they put up a new thread (but I wouldn't recommend it as it can create ...

In that case, I'd still suggest getting rid of the repetition and in general the format-wise aspects of newness and concentrate on the superficial aspects of the stereotypical poet: I ...

The part where they're "since you're in your third year at university and all," et cetera, comes across as something that's there completely for our benefit rather than something that ...

Harry Potter is like comfort food that's always kinda around. I started LOTR, but then had to put it down for a little. I should pick it up again, as ...

ASL gloves: click on G under "Main Dictionary" and scroll down to gloves. Thanks all!

*ohhh* I see. I've never been to a cave, that I know of, so that would explain why they weren't the first things to come to mind ^.^ As a ...

Mwahaha! I've dug up something from the dregs of my portfolio ^.^ with the aim of making it more poetic. Is it getting better?

Oh boy. Now I'll have to try this. But my family still won't forgive me for making pizza into grilled cheese, so any attempts must remain covert :D

I thought the repetition of the "Tell me..." and phrasing it all with a question got to be a little much. Maybe you could try rephrasing some as non-questions and ...

Sorry, I use quote/dialogue as synnonyms, which I probably shouldn't. :shrug: Honestly, I couldn't get through very much of it. Because of the lack of spacing, my eyes wandered on ...