Leahweird

I actually really enjoyed reading this! I didn't realize until afterward that it was a contest entry, and had specific reasons for choosing things. I guess it's kinf od like ...

That happens to me quite a lot. I'm not sure why it does that, or how to stop it. I always thought it had something to do with my copying ...

Why is she out in the snow in a sundress? These are the kinds of questions that hook me right away. The fact that this one never does get answered ...

This needs to be put into paragraphs in the worst way. Something like this on paper might work, but the internet maked things harder to read,and huge chunks of text ...

This is a good start, you are having some issues though. For one thing, you tense is fluctuating wildly. I think this is mostly caused by you starting as if ...

I really like these. All of them. You aren't kidding about the Super Duper Poet thing. I do think, how ever, that the one poem Do Flowers Grow on Trees ...

This is so beautiful. Your theme is haunting. I'm in love with your rhyme scheme. It seems so delicate, and it perfectly complements what you are trying to say, rather ...

This is a good start to a story. I like how you can tell a lot about the family from their interection. I would say though, that it's not really ...

I really liked this piece! It was unique, and I think you were ight to put it in fantasy. However, I do have one critique. Your opening lines seem very ...

This is a really well written piece. I love your description. "the matches were lit at my cheeks" is just one of the fascinating ways you found to relate things. ...

I can see you posted this a little while ago, but I wanted to say that I liked this. You need to break up the paragrapgmore though. Reading on a ...

Just a few nitpicks. And did the plant of good flower on such barren land?Like a poppy from the battlefield. And did the spores of evil fruit in such a ...

This was very well written, as usual. I've may have said this befre, but I love the tension between Key and Chess. She seems so jealous of Josh! It's kind ...

I liked how you're working harder at making the narrators different. I also thought that comparing enya to a dragon was genious. Very thematically appropriate. One actual criticism. You keep ...

Rule of thumb for paragraphs, start a new one everytime you have a new thought, like a change in who is speaking or what is being addressed. Do this even ...