Lauren2010

You're very welcome! I'm glad it helped ^^

I think that all the work you've already done is a really great foundation, so don't get me wrong! I get what you're saying about Gray being disconnected, and I ...

You're very welcome! And I can definitely see where you would get issues with discovering a twist late in the game. That's hard to work out! I think that there's ...

You're welcome! For Lizzie, maybe either when they're talking about looking her up in Leeds or after Alex finds out she's disappeared? I don't think you need more than a ...

Well I got that xD I'm more curious as to what in his personality caused him to decide this was a reason to go over there, because I kind of ...

Indeed. ;)

It's definitely a risky move! But, for me at least, I think it paid off in the end. :)

Of course, dear! Drafts are the best things to post on YWS, cause you get so much great perspective for when you go back to revise. ^^ I'm glad you ...

Good to know!

Cool! I'm super intrigued by the whole carnival atmosphere, and I can't wait to find out more! ^^

Good to know! Glad I was getting it right, which is a mark of good writing ^^ How old is Christian then?

Yeah, our literary submission system isn't always the best with format! And the centering is fun! I'm just old and wizened by higher education where looking at anything not in ...

I hate prologues.

Yay! I was afraid that I was completely overestimating how clear I was being. xD I agree, the ending needs some more work (it's needed huge work since the first ...

Thanks so much darling! Nothing was really meant to be too chronological? But I think I know what parts you mean, and it might be confusing? I'll have to read ...