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Hey rooboosh! I really enjoyed reading this! The writing itself is quite good, and it was very interesting to read. Now on to my nit-picking ;) This huge block of ...

Hey Shepherd! I really enjoyed this! Really I did! It's not bad at all, it's really very good, and you should definitely continue it. Though, I would have this be ...

Hey there! Here to critique again! This was an interesting chapter, but still watch the pacing. Slowing things down a bit and throwing in description is perfectly fine and will ...

Hey! Here again! You should definitely check out all the stuff in my last review, so I'm not going to restate any of that. I'll focus on some other things ...

Hey! Here to review again! Perhaps fate brought them together, both Lan and Huo studied in the same school naming Mo Hum School. It looked like some original school but ...

Hello fruityminyi! Well, you have an interesting concept here! I enjoyed reading this very much, and would be interested in seeing where you take this idea. The writing itself is ...

Hey Rygel! I just welcomed you, and imagine my surprise when you had posted something in the lovely Fantasy forum. Fantasy is sort of my thing. ;) Anyways. On to ...

Hey, sorry for the delay! I was on vacation for a while. I really enjoyed this! The flow of your writing in this story is very good, and I especially ...

Hey! Sorry for the delay, I was on vacation. This was pretty good, though I have a few nitpicks. First, I am also confused as to how they got away ...

Great chapter! You introduced all the information really easily, I didn't feel like I was being bombarded at all. I do have to agree though that Silas' death was really, ...

Hey Kyllorac! I really enjoyed these! They were far more true to the typical vampire than the crazy sparkling Twilight vamps. I really really liked the second one, with the ...

Hey! Nice chapter, lots of action, big plot change at the end, it's all great. I especially enjoyed CJ's escapades, and it's backfiring on her. She's such an amusing character. ...

This was really interesting, almost poetic. I enjoyed it. There are probably a few sentences that could be re-worded to flow better, but that's minimal and to keep up the ...

I totally called that twist ;) That's good... and bad. A twist is a twist, and still thrilling no matter what, but a really really unexpected twist is even better. ...

Hey Jackpot! This was an interesting prologue, though I'm not usually one for prologues. Prologues are pretty hard to write well, and I'm going to give you some pointers to ...