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Here's the review! She was a short, petite woman, so the extra weight, while barley barely anything, still made her muscles work with extra effort. h H er husband, Harled, ...

Yes! Another chapter! :D He stopped as well. “I know. That is the reason why I said the police believe so. Who am I to doubt them?” I would italicize ...

Hey there! I'm sorry I'm such a failure and took ages to get to this! I'm here now, though, right? :) I really enjoyed this chapter! The action was good, ...

Hey there, Mika! This is certainly interesting! A good start to something that can be really great! There are just a few things, simple things really, that can help you ...

Yay more Shifters! :D I don't have much to say about the chapter that hasn't beed said already. I really enjoyed it, and I forgot how much I love Crys ...

Hey Whisperer! Thanks for letting me know you put more up! I enjoyed this chapter, it was really interesting. I like the end, especially, very exciting! It makes me want ...

Hey ilyaeelz! This was a really interesting poem! I liked it. Is the formatting purposeful? If it has a meaning to you, I would keep it that way, because it's ...

Hey there Inkwell! I really enjoyed this poem. Is it in reference to those crazy people wanting to burn the Qur'an because of the 9/11 incident and the debate over ...

Hey there Whisperer! Wow, this really is interesting! I want to visit this pond and see these flowers and the blue mist. Great job creating such an intruiging place! I ...

Hey Hawk! I really enjoyed reading this! It's a good start to a very interesting idea. I love the subtlety about everything; we all know what they are but you ...

Tanya! This was so sad! Well I mean it's good, because it made me sad. Making a reader feel a story is one of the best things a writer can ...

Hey Tanya! My comments are in red! Maya ran, branches slapping at her face, bushes snagging the soft cotton of her long white dress. Her heartbeat echoed the sound of ...

Hey Crocks! Look I'm here to review like you requested! (Sorry for the delay): She sighed and hugged herself, shivering. It was going to rain hard tonight. There would probably ...

Hey Blackbird! Here as requested! :) This was very good! I really like the emotion in the piece, it's hard to really convey emotion in writing and this was great. ...

Tanya! This is so much improved from the first version! Fantastic job. :) Here are my few nitpicks: “Do it,” Maya thought almost eagerly, eyeing the blade. If he tried ...