LaughingHyena

No problem, looking forward to seeing the next entry! :D

No problem, looking forward to seeing the next entry! :D

Thanks so much for your comment, I'm home-educated too and have had similar experiences too, some of which inspired this poem :)

Thanks for commenting, I separated 'snap' from the previous line because I intended it to kind of stand out more from the other words and have a bit more weight ...

Thank you! :D

Unfortunately for some reason the editing thing wouldn't let me separate the stanzas with a single space, so I had to make do with stupid little asterisks. >:(

I have edited it, thanks :)

No problem, glad you found it helpful, and this certainly is not bad at all for a first attempt, better than my first attempt at poetry! :)

Just realized I duplicated a line by mistake! The part 'Rush at scarlet, gush at flesh/Consume so none may take your best' should have been ''Rush at scarlet, gush at ...

Very nice poem indeed! I love the descriptions used, particularly the way you describe the trees; 'Dilapidated trees dance sadly in the evening wind, They too held onto a dream'. ...

Thank you!! :D

Thanks for the comment, I hadn't thought about stanzas actually, it may have made it a bit easier to read, I shall definitely bear that in mind in future.

Thanks very much! :D

Thanks for your response, when typing it I did separate the bottom part with more space but the format seems to have made it closer to the poem, I shall ...