Laradear

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This may be a first draft, but it's very good. There were a ton of really long sentences, though, and I recommend shortening them or separating them. There were a ...

These are very beautiful lyrics. The stanzas have me wondering how the tune would go, though. I can really feel the passion behind the lyrics and I absolutely love the ...

Thank you for the feedback; this helps a lot! You've given me a ton of ideas to rewrite this chapter with and I can definitely see better ways to edit ...

Thank you so much for the feedback! I had the feeling that it progressed to quickly so I wanted a bit of confirmation. I figured by posting it I could ...

Thank you, Eros! I decided that in each chapter I want to be able to talk about something powerful or an important topic while continuing the plot and thought this ...

I think it would be awesome for you to continue on tongue reviewing this, and thank you for the feedback! This actually helps a lot. As for the song Sarah ...

Oh wow, this was excellent! I absolutely love the way you worded this and the way you presented the story made it project into my mind like a movie. I ...

Thank you so much! Your advice is very helpful and encouraging. I would love to keep you updated on future chapters, your reviews are very insightful and you seem like ...

Oh goodness. I was not expecting him to have been in a coma for four years. That was a not-so-lovely surprise on Toby's part. I really love how you portrayed ...