LanaBrown

This is a good piece. I think I get what the central message of it is but I'm not entirely sure. Perhaps you could clarify the second part. From what ...

Hey there JoJo I really like the prolouge it was good. I can really feel that your character feels guilty about those kids. You should try adding more imagery so ...

Hey Jazzy, so you finally got up the nerve to post your story well mine is going to be bigger than yours. not that this is a competition its just ...

Dear thestorygirl, I loved this poem and I can see that you have a good idea and flow. But it was a bit simple and really short. You should try ...

Dear FreakPunks, Okay, first off I wanna say that I really loved this story. The first thing that made me wanna read it was the title Hide and Seek it ...

Dear Jas, Is there something wrong with you? Are you hyped up on too much Red Bull or something? How in the world could you think this is the worst ...

Okay so heres the deal, I agree with Amnien and Warrior Princess. The wedding was rushed To much dialouge Peeta never speaks(at his own wedding...akward) Not enough desription And I ...

First off this is such a cute story I love Harvest Moon. I like the way Gray is nervous and I love the poem he wrote but,on that note, here ...