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  • Short Story » Supernatural, Horror Re: The Angel of Death

    II love the story. It makes me feel as if I'm in the character's shoes. The dialogue and the modifiers and descriptors are perfectly balanced out. I like the concept ...

    Apr 2, 2013
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Fantasy Re: The covered ground of deceased~

    Great job first stories are always hard. I'm gonna get serious now. I was totally confused through the entire thing. The description isn't that great either. You need to up ...

    Apr 2, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Horror Re: 911-prologue

    Okay so first of all there wasn't much on how the main character was feeling. It had way to much dialogue and not enough feeling. Also like SushiSashimi333 the "it ...

    Apr 2, 2013


It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien