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  • Short Story » Supernatural, Horror Re: The Angel of Death

    II love the story. It makes me feel as if I'm in the character's shoes. The dialogue and the modifiers and descriptors are perfectly balanced out. I like the concept ...

    Apr 2, 2013
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Fantasy Re: The covered ground of deceased~

    Great job first stories are always hard. I'm gonna get serious now. I was totally confused through the entire thing. The description isn't that great either. You need to up ...

    Apr 2, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Horror Re: 911-prologue

    Okay so first of all there wasn't much on how the main character was feeling. It had way to much dialogue and not enough feeling. Also like SushiSashimi333 the "it ...

    Apr 2, 2013


If you can't describe what you are doing as a process, you don't know what you're doing.
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