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Re: Mirrors
I like this, you provided great detail in such short sentences how mirrors supposedly can't lie. I also like how you said "They can't give us false judgement, They can't ...
Jan 28, 2018 -
Re: The Infection: New World
This was very good! You provided great imagery for the audience that I'm sure everyone would love. I liked how you described why this man was doing what he did, ...
Jan 28, 2018 -
Re: One
This is amazing, the only comment I would say is explain why these "people want you". When I read this, I wanted to know what this secret was that you ...
Jan 28, 2018 -
Re: when will you believe it for yourself?
This. Was. Stunning. Like, seriously, I can't tell why I'm not even using exclamation marks.XD Lake here for a review, Pollution is over in the corner, glaring daggers into my ...
Jan 24, 2018 -
Re: The Monster
Oh. My. GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOODDDDDDDDDDDDD!!!!!!!!!!!!!! How do you know to write the way into my heart!? I love how you write all the names of your friends and loved ones. And I'm ...
Jan 23, 2018 -
Re: Grim's Tales Of Heros and Halfwits Part 1
awwwwwwwwwww.............GRIIIIIIIIIIMMMMMMMMMMMMM........................adorable! Oh, Grim? Do you like me and Pollution? :) If you don't that's ok. And FLUMA I LOVED THIS! I won't call you by your
Jan 23, 2018 -
Re: Black Butler with a Twist (S1 E5: His Butler, Chance Encounter)
OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH SHIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIITTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLOT TWISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!! I know I haven't actually watched Black Butler yet, but I do know who these
Jan 23, 2018 -
Re: The Persona
GRRRIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIMMMMMMMMM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! FLUMA HAS DONE THIS FOR YOU!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU PROBABLY APPRECIATE WHAT SHE DID BECAUSE THIS DESCRIBES YOU!!!!!!!!!!!! AND IF YOU DON'T A
Jan 19, 2018 -
Re: I want to be like Google
I love this because not only do you express in free verse, you also create imagery of what Google does. My favorite line I think, would be "As open-minded as ...
Jan 18, 2018 -
Re: And When You Opened Your Eyes Part.1
This was so deep, now at first I thought you were talking about a girl that you wanted to be with so badly, but then I realized you had been ...
Jan 18, 2018 -
Re: Smoke and Mirrors
This is inspiring, honestly it is, and in certain cases, I almost think you're talking about Fluma ;) But anyways, I loved this, I don't have any suggestions for you ...
Jan 18, 2018 -
Re: Love: A Poem in Three Parts
This was just amazing. I just...wow. This spoke to me deeply, so congratulations. At first, it seemed as if the first boy you had loved treated you fair, but then ...
Jan 18, 2018 -
Re: 1
So, I absolutely love this dude! You provided great detail, which led to amazing imagery, and I loved every moment of it! The only thing I suggest fixing is "'Don't ...
Jan 18, 2018 -
Re: Gilbert's Interview with God
I may not be religious, but the way you described God in His throne and everything about his presence, made me feel as if I was. Excellent word choice too! ...
Jan 18, 2018 -
Re: Remember Her?
This...was...FANTASTIC!!!!!!! You provided great detail and imagery, that I actually felt like the speaker. I love how each stanza describes how she changes, from being a light-hearted girl, to being ...
Jan 18, 2018
