LMJRayner

Ha it wasn't dumb, it just could have been better is what I was saying, I'm sure you'll find something even more tantalising :)

Annaclare, that was one of the nicest things I've ever read in a comment. Thanks :) and I will stay classy! LMJ

I am really glad that you liked it. It was actually quite hard to write. Not physically but emotionally without sounding too dramatic. It was a recent event in my ...

I didn't know how to separate my paragraphs, so when I submitted the whole thing got stuck together. Hence the apparent random periods. Thanks for the comment. LMJ

Hey Traunt, thanks for the review, I'm glad it connected with you in some way, I guess that's the whole point so I'm doing something right. Your kind words will ...

Thanks.

Thanks for the feedback. I understand completely about making the characters real rather than cardboard cut outs, I'm used to writing longer fiction which means getting the time to characterise ...

Thanks for being so critical but a few things you should know is. Replacing said with replied and words like that is not a better word choice. Using said is ...

Thanks a lot, lot of pressure on me now when writing the next one ha. I look forward to your next inevitable review :) LMJ

I agree completely with the it and his situation and im going to ammend it. Reading this ive thought of a better ending and im going to rewrite it slightly ...

Thanks a lot, I've been working on this villian for a new book and there's something about him I really like and I'm glad you like it as well. Cheers, ...

Haha, I am a Legend though ;)

How do you make your quotes look like that, when I quote it looks like amateur hour, I want those boxes lol.

The reason I mention the sounds of metal bending and stuff like that is because he is overreacting, he's hearing slight noises and interpreting them as something sinister. And I ...

Thanks a lot, I always like your reviews :) Hopefully I can keep the streak going and get a fan for life :D Cheers, LMJ