Kyuubi

I'm working on it actually, I've been trying to get more help for my writing problems (dyslexia, etc.) so I'm waiting to post until I make sure it's not as ...

Well I will have more up shortly hopefully hahaha

Yup, yup, yup, all of that is planned for chapter 1. Again, this was just to provide context for the main story

Hee hee...I was laughing while reading the first one. I always imagined Light getting caught on the toilet...*snicker*. As a very faithful DeathNote fan, I'm not allowed to laugh..But I ...

Okay..well, thanks for the review to begin with. I know there were a lot of mistakes in it, because of the fact it was rushed. I plan to take my ...

I love it. It's really well done. I just read the first part but never got around to critiqing. Good job. I really want to read more.

Okay. I knew it ws lacking some detail but I couldn't think of anything to make it better. Two days without sleep does things, ya know?

I thought it was okay. It was not my favorite but, Dan, you know me. I can't keep my focus for than a few minutes before I trail off. It ...

I have read and researched the entire series. They do have parachutes. How else would they get to the ground. Just because they are Spartans, doesn't mean that they don't ...

Okay well thanks for reading. I fixed it up a little and hope it's better than it was. I'm actually going to use this in English class so any more ...

Well thanks Tiger for that helpful response. That will really help me get better at writing.

Thanks for reading. I was in a rush to write this today. I thought my family was going somewhere. Is there any way to edit it without rewriting the whole ...

I thought it was excellent. It does flow so it's easy to follow and read. I agree with everyone else. Just work on your word choice and it should be ...

I happened to like it. The only problem I see is that it's too LONG. Try to shorten it up or break it down into sections instead of posting something ...

oh one more thing.....you should clarify it a little better. i got confused and disoriented near the middle. and what was it you were trying to say?