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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: In The Beginnings (Chapter 2)

    Thank you! It was a bit shorter than I meant, and I think you were the one to point that out. So I added the rest of the page. Even ...

    Apr 24, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: In The Beginnings (Chapter 2)

    I did mean through, thanks! And mist was intentional. I'll fix the comma as well. Thank you so much for the review!

    Apr 24, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: A Song of Exile - Prologue: Dark Alleys pt. I

    Wow, this is incredible. I've always loved this setting. Poor, dingy. It's always drawn my attention. And the way you describe it puts me into that time. I could feel ...

    Jul 24, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Hopeless Hokey Pokey

    I love it. It shows a personal story, without it being personal, if that makes sense. One i can connect with without having to think about it. The words give ...

    Jul 24, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: my hand is falling asleep on a bed of pins and needles

    I really loved your poem! It brings me to a place where i can understand and relate. At the same time it shows a foreignness that i never knew. It's ...

    Jul 24, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Prologue

    Hi ^^ thanks so much for your review. I did change the orphanage situation. A Gorgon is a notoriously ugly mythical creature. Usually known for being so ugly they turn ...

    Jul 24, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Prologue

    Thanks so much, your review really helped. For some reason, the entire time I was writing this, I felt like i was missing something. I've made the changes you pointed ...

    Jul 24, 2016


You got rid of them. Yes, that's just like you. Getting rid of everything unpleasant instead of learning to put up with it.
— Aldous Huxley, Brave New World