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Re: The Cost Of Life
This is awesome! You found a message that proves so meaningful for so many people. That is what great writing does! Your descriptions are absolutely great, and you used the ...
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Re: The Glade
Snap crackle POP! That was some saucy stuff right there, bro. I liked this a lot. I think we've all been in this situation before, making it easily relatable. I ...
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Re: Grim Door
Deep stuff! If I interpreted the meaning correctly, I agree that sometimes change can be overwhelming in every way. I really like your work here, because I think it's something ...
Jul 3, 2011 -
Re: Perfect world
I like this! Although I'll admit I don't entirely understand the message, this poem still proves to be quite thought-provoking. I feel a lot of reversal going on, providing a ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: The Thief and the Tunnel
Overall, this is very well-written. A few thoughts: The first paragraph could be made a lot stronger with some better word choice to describe John. I love that he was ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: Cordvac
I'm a fan! The first paragraph as a whole was a tad shaky, but the rest was real solid. Cordvac seems like an interesting character, and I'd love to know ...
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Re: Nevermind them, Us.
Very good! If you hadn't said you were new at this topic, I would have easily thought otherwise. It flows very well, which may be one of the best aspects ...
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Re: Shrina - Prologue
This is really interesting! You caught my attention quickly and I'm excited for future installments! The only critique I have to offer is that while most of it is spot-on, ...
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Re: Patio - HayesTheHayes
Nice. I like how straightforward and to the point this is! I found it interesting that you dropped the rhyme scheme in the final stanza - whether it was intended ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: Tend your Flame!
I love this! I think we've all been there at one point or another in life, and you really knocked it out of the park! You developed the message very ...
Jul 2, 2011
