Kylan

The poem was clearly about my musical endeavers being compared to sex. You made the opposite connection because you wanted to. Well, maybe it was clear to you as the ...

DragonWriter should learn to spell, but she is right... -Kylan

This is an excellent beginning. Intriguing and promising. I really enjoyed how you parallel the the feelings woman and the girl on the swingset. Clever. But some things were confusing ...

Hey JC! Thanks for your comments so far! To clarify about the unknown terms, however... Pastless is another word for a group - or the whole population - of Clones. ...

Fantastic! I love your writing style. Very smooth, real, easy to read... You really are able to give insight into your characters mind. You have many profound and true-to-life one ...

Thank you both for reading! And Twit, there is no law that says you can't open a book to the middle and sample an authors writing :D. Hope you two ...

Well, Trident since you've critiqued much of my work I thought I'd return the favor. First off, your writing style in some places is very hard to slog through. In ...

Actually, to all those wondering if their will be a part 2...probably not. This is actually a piece of a novella that I wrote about a school shooting. It was ...

Hmmm...This could use some work.... I'm going to be honest, but hopefully not too harsh with you. This story reminds me of a watered down Nancy Drew spin-off mixed in ...

I thought this was fantastic!! In my opinion much more masterfully done than your prologue! Your style of writing is very intriguing and you rarely tell (a good thing. Something ...

I thought this was fantastic!! In my opinion much more masterfully done than your prologue! Your style of writing is very intriguing and you rarely tell (a good thing. Something ...

Hey writersdomain!! As always, excellent. You're description and characterization is very real. I've just got a coupla comments... Okay, so why is Creiha having all of these fainting spells??? She ...

Hey writersdomain!! As always, excellent. You're description and characterization is very real. I've got a coupla comments... Okay, so why is Creiha having all of these fainting spells??? She only ...

Wow. There's a lot of emotion behind this poem... It strikes me as having a kind of angered/confused/tearful vibe. Did it just come to you? Or is it based on ...

Listen to WritersDomain!! Ahe knows what she's talking about!! -Kylan