Kylan

June -- This was good. Solid stuff. As someone else mentioned, not overly appealing as an introduction, but you've painted a fairly relatable character for the audience to sympathize with. ...

Love -- Definately shocking. And well-written as always. I'm still kind of at a loss for words, for multiple reasons. Let's address the writing first. I think you captured the ...

jones32 -- There are bits and pieces of this poem that I like very much, but on the whole, they are choked out by unoriginal language and a lackluster, half-hearted ...

mizz-iceberg -- This piece looked lonely. And you've critiqued stuff of mine before. Here's to returning favors. Anyway, this is respectable. It's not particularly memorable and it kind of sinks ...

I edited your post so that your author's note does not stretch the page out. In the future, treat anything you type out in the post box like the poem ...

Eimear -- I really like the concept behind this piece, especially how you portrayed a relationship/love as a business transaction. It's a unique take on things, for me at least. ...

stolenHearts -- Basically, what you have here is an emo poem in the advanced stages. While I enjoyed your first four line very much, I felt that the message you ...

Hannah -- You know, I'm not sure I've ever critiqued something of yours, dollface. But regardless, I'd say it was high time that I did so and repay a little ...

McHelpfulPants -- Fantastic. It's good to see some real poetry from a new member every once in a while. I thoroughly enjoyed your use of imagery and I like the ...

xanthan gum -- This doesn't really excite me all that much. It was well written enough, but I think that in the end, your word choice and moral got in ...

Jared -- This is excellent. A vast improvement compared to some of your other poems. You have grasped the intricasies of imagery and ambiguous language. It was really refreshing to ...

Hannah - This was an interesting poem. Though a few of your lines are fresh and stimulating, I think that you're walking a very thin line by using Shakespearean language ...

Jared - So here it is! Long awaited and discussed! I decided to read it immediately. I like it. I think that your ability to craft scenes of tension and ...

Clo - Ah. Good to read something of yours. It's like finding a twenty dollar bill in a pair of pants you haven't worn for years. This is good stuff. ...

I echo Blink. Also check out John Steinbeck. Extremely American. The Grapes Of Wrath focuses on America's labor struggle, while East of Eden is a kind of epic retelling of ...