Kylan

I definately agree with Meevs. That stanza makes no sense. Then again, poetry doesn't need to make sense. However, my advice is to cut it out. The poem is fantastic ...

First off, It was new and original and fun to read...sort of. (mean, sorry :wink: ) I just have a couple things to comment on. 1.) Too much description: Description ...

Excellent poem!!! I do have a few suggestions though. The entire thing is a little repetitious. I think it would be even more powerful if you cut out a couple ...

I like the fact that you are rhyming. No one seems to do that anymore. But to rhyme you need a good topic and good rhymes. Your poem rhymes seemed ...

This is an excellent start. The idea is fresh and in some ways contemporary (the terrorism part). My only advice would lie in the last sentence where you foreshadowed to ...

Everything happens too fast. One minute she's in her living room, the next she's in "an enclosed facility" miles away. Add some action/description on her way there. Let a couple ...