Kylan

Very interesting stuff, gadi! Unique, well described, perfectly intiguing. I do love plagues and pandemics. Very nice. There are only a few places that need a little tweaking: A silent ...

Eva, I have just fallen in love with your story. This is brilliant. Sure, there are a few things to fix here and there, but on the whole the story ...

Wow. This was nice! I enjoyed the structure of the poem and the emotion behind it. You made it just the right length because if the poem was any longer, ...

I took the liberty of spacing out the piece in the crit below. Please space your stories in the future. On to the critique! I'm not sure whether it is ...

Alright, Sir MM. Here's your critique: Overall Impressions: Your writing style is absolutely delicious. You manage to keep your reader reading and entertained. The sentence structure varies nicely and

This was good! The meter was off in a few places, however. But it's hard to keep track of meter when rhyming, I know. These are some lines I think ...

AUUGGGHHH! So many adjectives! Please, please set aside your thesaurus and cut out some of your twenty-letter descriptive words. They really detract from your story. A.) They make it hard ...

First of all, USE THE SPACE BAR! There are numerous places in this piece where two words are joined together by the lack of a space. Read through your story ...

I liked this. You know what you're talking about (or at least faking it very well) and that's refreshing. It shows a dedication to your work. Keep it up. The ...

This was actually very good. I'm impressed with your style of writing and - until the last portion of the story - your grasp of the show-don't-tell concept. Your description ...

Well, here's my crit. I really enjoyed this piece. And I've never actually critiqued a fantasy story yet, so here goes. Characters For the most part, your characters were realistic. ...

This was good. Your description is superb. This is probably my favorite line: The area was now vacant except for the stunted branches that laid piously beside their towering fathers. ...

That was good! Fun stuff, really. Your writing style is very direct and to the point and you have a way with constructing sentences to inspire just the right emotion. ...

This was good. Not great, but good. You have an excellent voice and your style is extremely unique. It seems like a farce or a satire. It also seems like ...

Hey there! Alright. You, my friend, have a problem with info-dumping. In the beginning you chuck a bunch of unimportant details and backstory at us, bogging us down and boring ...