Kurt-Ethen-Jarram

Also something that has just occured to me. The line you pick out about the Arcon unit and then say there is no explanation or back story?. Is that sentence ...

Hey Silversun, Thank you for your comments. Even though I welcome all forms of constructive criticism and I would rather someone picked out where i had gone wrong rather than ...

Very interesting subjects. i enjoyed reding this but felt i could not identifie with it, but tht does not mean i did not think it was good. i very much ...

Yeah i agree with the above. It envokes a lot of images but does not directly explain the and thats what i think is really interesting about this poem. Well ...

I would really think that this would perhaps fall under the catagory of lyrical poetry or even lyrics as it's rhyming couplets lean in that direction, even though good insight ...

Good use of words, but to me only seems half finished. Knock out a couple more stanzas and this will be really good.

Thank you Jas that is helpfull. I think due to my dyspraxia (i use that as a fact not an excuse) that even at twenty one years of age punctuation ...

That is one of the reasons i was aprehensive about posting the story on this site. It doesnt actually take place in any earthly setting, Eligan is a place of ...