Krystal6

you have a wonderful story and I just wanna point out the 1 problem I noticed. '...With half shut eyes and the salt of the sea corrupting her vision she ...

Amazing I only found one error your sentence is continuous and in the following quote you need a comma not a period. 'he put his hand on my shoulder. I ...

I think it has a real great plot and spelling, but your grammar isn't your best work. I found a lot of errors. One of them being from this sentence ...

I love the feel of Fantasy I get when I read this but sadly I have to admit that there were some spelling and grammar issues such as 'older brother ...

I think you did a wonderful job, the plot is clear the grammar is good and the spelling has a few glitches but over all I give you a B+ ...

I like the story and the main concept of it all but its a little bit to fast, and I found some grammar and spelling errors. Next time maybe you ...

Amazing, your doing so well. It was hard to read this on its own with no background info though. Maybe next time you can publish it all together. I noticed ...