Krupp

Nicely done. Only thing I can say is that maybe you should consider your spacing between paragraphs, because it comes across very abrupt when it's being read. With that said, ...

This sounds like it could've been in the book of Psalms, sort of...and that's a compliment, believe it or not. I find it rather interesting to read into something that ...

Wow. That defenitely looked fun to write. Very challenging to be able to get words starting with the same letter workign like that in a sentece; I've never been able ...

For the longest time I have called Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas my favorite book for reasons I could never really figure out... Now that I think about it, ...

Bogart indeed. I don't see these kinds of characters often anymore, so it's fun to see one pop up now and then. Imagery and the atmosphere were great, delivered the ...

I just came across this and found out for myself that it was brilliant. I am not exaggerating. The humor alone in the beginning adds a perfect touch to this, ...

I have to admit that I'm way behind in reading this. I haven't even read the other chapters of the story. However, I am curious as to what this is ...

Pretty much whatever I wanted to say critiquing-wise the poster above me took care of. Except for the part where he realizes he's being followed. I suggest you go back ...

It was pretty funny... I wouldn't do the whole capital letter thing you were doing though. If you wanna do something that'll stick out next time, it'd be better to ...

Honestly, the formatting of this is least to my eyes it is. Break it down and make less lines. It's just a bit more convienent. As for the actual prose ...

it was almost too short for me to find anything wrong with it... The imagery was a great way to make it appealing as well. The only thing I'd have ...

Anything I could've said was pretty much spken aloud by uh...yeah...heh. To be honest, the only thing that really bothered me was the bold print that you had on one ...

It's cool hear someone else is writing a band story...I am as well. The song is also impressive, considering you wrote it from scratch (I'm assuming that you didn't have ...

Brilliant...quite honestly, that's all that comes to mind for me. I apologize if I can't really give you any critiquing if you wanted some. This piece really does a great ...

TO be honest, this seems more like prose than poetry.. I did a piece just like this earlier this week, I believe. It's great sounding; and I actually liked it ...